Promise To Live (A/T)

[Imperial-Hippy]

Title: Promise To Live. I love you.
Author(s): Imperial-Hippy
Character(s): Tahiri/Anakin
Timeframe: post SBS
Summary: How can you live, after your love has died and taking your soul with him? A song fic about Tahiri losing Anakin.
Disclaimer: I don’t own star wars. The lyrics are owed by Keen.

AN: this is song fic I thought of while listening to Keen, 'Bend and Break'

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When you, when you forget your name
When old faces all look the same

A girl sat curled up on the floor, legs tucked in to her chest, arms wrapped around them, forehead resting on her knees, weeping.

Meet me in the morning when you wake up
Meet me in the morning then you'll wake up

His voice, filled with such love, longing and sadness, taunted her. He wanted her to live on but how could she live with out him next to her.

If only I don't bend and break
I'll meet you on the other side
I'll meet you in the light

He was waiting for her, waiting for the day they could hold each other in their arms once again. The day when there souls could merge once again. They are one, separated they are not complete. Their hearts scream for each over. To bask in each other’s presence once again.

If only I don't suffocate
I'll meet you in the morning when you wake

She couldn’t breathe without him. Everyday was another vibroblade stabbed into her broken hart. Yet she had to hold on. She is a Jedi and must follow the will of the Force. Though she some times felt the force was mocking her very existence.

Bitter and hardened heart
Aching waiting for life to start

She was not alive anymore. Once a lifetime ago she had been fiery and jolly, a girl who could talk the hind legs of a nerf. But now she was a corpse waiting for the time when she could regain her soul. For her life would start when she cast away her fragile prison of flesh, and embrace the light and with it her love.

Meet me in the morning when you wake up
Meet me in the morning then you'll wake up

She could end it now, she had thought about it many times in the life she had ‘lived’ after losing him. It would be easy. She could just stop the blood from entering her brain by using the Force. It would be quick and painless.

And quite fitting she thought. The Force has caused her so much pain and now she could use it to end her suffering. But he would never forgive her for that. He had told her that she had to live on and when the Force decides it they could be together once more. She had promised him and that was that. She could – would not, go back on her promise.

She had promised him that they would meet the end together, but in that final, hellish moment she had abandoned him. Left him to face his own destiny. She should have been there, she doubted it would have made a difference except they would now be together in whatever place he waits for her. She refused to break another promise to her hero-boy.

If only I don't bend and break
I'll meet you on the other side
I'll meet you in the light

She will hold on for as long as she can. Until battle claims her body or loneliness claims her heart. She would hold on and he would wait, and one day they would be together for the rest of time.

If only I don't suffocate
I'll meet you in the morning when you wake

Wiping a hand across her eyes, she uncurled her body and stood up, looking down at her table she saw a halo. It was of her and Anakin, in a different life. They were happy. A sad smile touched her lips and with a sigh she climbed into her bed. She hugged her pillow, picturing his strong sleeping figure next to her.

A tear trickled down her soft face. She thought of him as she fell slowly asleep. Thoughts of what were, what could have been and what will be, as long as she could just hold on. “I promise, my love. I promise.”

If only I don't bend and break
I'll meet you on the other side
I'll meet you in the light
If only I don't suffocate
I'll meet you in the morning when you wake

[emlayy]

This is very good but you really really really really really need to spell check.

01. She's sitting on the floor. Not the 'flour', which is a product used for baking.
02. Her arms are wrapped around her. They aren't raping her.
03. Heart. I'm not quite sure how you can misspell that, though I suppose we all make stupid typos all the time. In any case, it's not spelled 'hart'. Hart is a name.
04. She couldn't breathe without him. Breath is a noun.
05. Without is one word.
06. It's a vibroblade, not a viroblade. (Though I do admit I thought it was a viroblade at first too.) Also, it's not a proper noun, so it doesn't need to be capitalized.
07. Force is capitalized. Always.
08. It's her very existence. 'Vary' means to fluctuate or change from person to person.
09. She had been fairy and jolly? Fairy is a fictional creature that can fly and use magic. I'm not quite sure what word you're looking for there, but I highly doubt it's fairy.
10. It's 'wiping' her hand across her eyes. Unless she is somehow whipping herself. Even if you intentionally wrote 'whipping', wiping would flow much better.

Okay. Sorry if I sound a little rude, but all the errors detract from the impact the story makes. It's very hard to take a story seriously when you run into errors every few moments. ;D If you don't have a spell-check program on your computer, then I suggest Googling it, as they have a lot of online spell checkers.

But it is a good story.

[Imperial-Hippy]

lol woops!

i did spell check it, the problem is the words were still words that my pc thought were correct. if that makes sence lol

Thanks for the help i have corrected it now. ;D

[Courtney Solo]

There is a spell check button on the post reply, Jamie. Just to let ya know.